rough cut 2

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•'Nice establishing shot but it is quite slow
•Change the font of the titles – it is not good
•You need institutional logos at the start
•Look at the placement of the film title – it is right on top *The shot where he walks across the screen with the lamppost in it is too long
•Some of your shots are much better
•Consider placement of other titles too – some of them are over the action
•Consider sound track
•The shot after he has thrown the leaflet away and the shot on the bridge is too far shot over to the right – it looks odd as he has just been in the centre of the frame
•As an opening title sequence it runs well
•Narrative is difficult to follow'